tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2142251318601917690.post9151634591960870545..comments2023-10-20T03:44:49.162-04:00Comments on Empyrean Dreams: Royce's Dilemma - Chapter 1Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08625886238673898988noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2142251318601917690.post-3503169886935923862015-11-11T21:31:58.650-05:002015-11-11T21:31:58.650-05:00I'm hooked! Very good first chapter. Straight ...I'm hooked! Very good first chapter. Straight in the action. We already have a hint of the political and social climate and we saw some of the species. And there is a whiff of mystery to hook us into coming back for more. Well done. :)<br /><br />Sonyja Lerulv FreyjadottirSonyja Lerulv Freyjadottirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12138086645257403857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2142251318601917690.post-31648343663687950012014-03-07T02:35:58.801-05:002014-03-07T02:35:58.801-05:00Hi, Nathan signing on. I'm working on rereadi...Hi, Nathan signing on. I'm working on rereading the storylines on Empyrean, and since nobody else has commented anywhere yet, I thought I might log a few thoughts on each chapter as I pass through. Maybe I can even prompt a little discussion along the way. <br /><br />This chapter was my first realization of how well Laine writes dialogue. The hard part is to make it sound like people are just talking, while still conveying the important information that moves a story along. You also have to decide on each character's "voice", although that gets easier as they become more real and start talking in your head. The other big bonus of this chapter is how well it establishes characters: you know who Royce is and (some of) what she's up to. You get a pretty good idea of how a couple of Maraug goons operate, and what the cross-species interface is like. Last, this does what an opening chapter should do: you know some bad business is coming soon and can't wait to see how it goes down.Nathan Largehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11699073963669402716noreply@blogger.com